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DrkPassenger |
Miami's full moon
Nov 27 2008, 2:56 PM EST
Miami's full moon shines brightlyKeen knife blade pierces the aorta, twice Fulfillment, a job well done 2 out of 4 found this valuable. Do you?
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Tiger-10-8_1 |
1. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 27 2008, 7:14 PM EST
Only 17 syllables in any haiku, but I give you credit for trying. I like it. Tiger
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JayC16 |
2. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 1:18 AM EST
"Only 17 syllables in any haiku, but I give you credit for trying. I like it. Tiger"I never was too keen on rules of writing when it comes to poetry. The great poets seem to do as they please... misspell words, run on sentences, fragmented sentences, etc. I figure any poet can claim poetic license. Couldn't that be the case here? I don't know crap about haiku. Is that were you add the boxed numbers to add to the same sum in any direction? (I know it is not that, but it could be, for all I know.) Would you mind enlightening me, so I can join in on the fun. Here is a sample of my award winning poetry (just don't ask what award): My granny was wicked and vile with no less than a Harlequin's smile she sliced then excreted his bile poor grandpa was tossed in a pile There once was a man from Miami who stalked and seran wrapped my grammy; she was lovely and sweet as a lemon she choked 'em as they spewed out their flemmin; When her passion perplexed her, her conscious vexed her, she then slipped up and was injected by Dexter. (this is a first rought draft.) 3 out of 4 found this valuable. Do you? |
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K9tblaze911 |
3. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 4:15 PM EST
"I never was too keen on rules of writing when it comes to poetry. The great poets seem to do as they please... misspell words, run on sentences, fragmented sentences, etc. I figure any poet can claim poetic license. Couldn't that be the case here? I don't know crap about haiku. Is that were you add the boxed numbers to add to the same sum in any direction? (I know it is not that, but it could be, for all I know.)I like it JayC.... I don't know crap about haiku, or hoocky...poor granny...... more...more....more 1 out of 2 found this valuable. Do you? |
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JayC16 |
4. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 6:47 PM EST
"I like it JayC....It took me hours!!! O wasn't satisified when it was finished last night,but I posted it anyway. (I was soooo tired) Do you find this valuable? |
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Hanksfuture1stwife |
5. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 7:50 PM EST
"I never was too keen on rules of writing when it comes to poetry. The great poets seem to do as they please... misspell words, run on sentences, fragmented sentences, etc. I figure any poet can claim poetic license. Couldn't that be the case here? I don't know crap about haiku. Is that were you add the boxed numbers to add to the same sum in any direction? (I know it is not that, but it could be, for all I know.)This is Great! Kudos!! 1 out of 1 found this valuable. Do you? |
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DrkPassenger |
6. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:00 AM EST
"Only 17 syllables in any haiku, but I give you credit for trying. I like it. Tiger"Who knew?--I thought the rule was 5 words, 7 words, 5 words.. I'll try again: Spurt, spurt, the blood flows Taking life, I feed once more Immersing in death. 3 out of 3 found this valuable. Do you? |
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MidnightCastAway |
7. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:13 AM EST
"Miami's full moon shines brightlyAll of this is happening in Miami and I was just off for three days . Sonny Crockett Do you find this valuable? |
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K9tblaze911 |
8. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:15 AM EST
"It took me hours!!!OK, you've had some rest...now give us another one..!! Do you need a boat cruise out on the bay to refresh..?? We can arrange that for you...have some magic jellies, they will help your mind flo... Do you find this valuable? |
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K9tblaze911 |
9. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:19 AM EST
"Miami's full moon shines brightlyI like the way you think.... 1 out of 1 found this valuable. Do you? |
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mike91848 |
10. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:06 PM EST
"I like the way you think...."The haiku is the 5-7-5 as far as I know but when it comes to poetry the poet has the last word! Dexter is so cool Dexter’s knife creates blood pools Dexter cleans his tools This is my STAB at it! LOL! 1 out of 1 found this valuable. Do you? |
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K9tblaze911 |
11. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:15 PM EST
"All of this is happening in Miami and I was just off for three days . Sonny Crockett"I love you Sonny Crockett Do you find this valuable? |
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K9tblaze911 |
12. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:17 PM EST
"The haiku is the 5-7-5 as far as I know but when it comes to poetry the poet has the last word!Great Stab Mike.... Do you find this valuable? |
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mike91848 |
13. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:56 PM EST
There once was an old man named MikeWhose postings about Rita were well liked? Who knew then that one of his friends had a NAC For posting so many thoughts out of Wack! This old friend seemed so nice Even PM’d once or twice Then all hell broke loose When this old friend tightened the noose Pointing this way and that talking smack About friends who tried using tact But in the end the old friend was caught in the act Posting smack and did so with such a great NAC I'm not a poet and my post shows it. In this case though I needed to vent. So I said what I think and will let nature takes its course. Do you find this valuable? |
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K9tblaze911 |
14. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 1:04 PM EST
"There once was an old man named MikeMike...this is perfect....it's great....i am so proud of you.!! 0 out of 1 found this valuable. Do you? |
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mike91848 |
15. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 1:22 PM EST
"Mike...this is perfect....it's great....i am so proud of you.!!"Thanks! :) 0 out of 1 found this valuable. Do you? |
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JayC16 |
16. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 30 2008, 1:07 AM EST
"OK, you've had some rest...now give us another one..!! Do you need a boat cruise out on the bay to refresh..?? We can arrange that for you...have some magic jellies, they will help your mind flo..."Had M & M's with popcorn yesterday. Oreo's today. Haiku - 5,7,5, huh? Oreo's, Mmmmm, dark, white, dark The cream filling ... so cool, so light My life for an Oreo Tiger said 17 syllables 5,7,5 Oreo's, Mmmm Mmmm Yummy cream filling, cool, light Twist, seperate, lick then bite Do you find this valuable? |
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Tiger-10-8_1 |
17. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 30 2008, 11:11 AM EST
JayC16, I said 17 syllables not words, and a Haiku is a Japapese art form and in the time of the samurai and the code of Bushido(read Shogun by James Clavell)all worriors wrote their death poems before they took up their dutys.Each haiku has 4 lines,any word with more than1 syllable counts as 2 or 3 whatever.The syllables do not follow a rule about the number per line,like5,7,5. I am a poet, there are a lot of things you can do with poetry but the rhyme is so out of style nowthat the whole thing has become ridiculous. I wrote this limmerick when I was 10 . There was a young whore name of Sunny, with disposition exceedingly funny. ( I can't figure out how to put in form)Line3,She gave so often for free,Line4,without charging a fee,5,that she often came home without money.I rhyme naturally when speaking. BTW I like all the stuff everybody wrote.Tiger 1 out of 2 found this valuable. Do you? |