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DrkPassenger
DrkPassenger
Miami's full moon
Nov 27 2008, 2:56 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 27 2008, 2:56 PM EST
Miami's full moon shines brightly
Keen knife blade pierces the aorta, twice
Fulfillment, a job well done
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Tiger-10-8_1
1. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 27 2008, 7:14 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 27 2008, 7:14 PM EST
Only 17 syllables in any haiku, but I give you credit for trying. I like it. Tiger 1  out of 1 found this valuable. Do you?    
JayC16
JayC16
2. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 1:18 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 28 2008, 1:18 AM EST
"Only 17 syllables in any haiku, but I give you credit for trying. I like it. Tiger"
I never was too keen on rules of writing when it comes to poetry. The great poets seem to do as they please... misspell words, run on sentences, fragmented sentences, etc. I figure any poet can claim poetic license. Couldn't that be the case here? I don't know crap about haiku. Is that were you add the boxed numbers to add to the same sum in any direction? (I know it is not that, but it could be, for all I know.)
Would you mind enlightening me, so I can join in on the fun.

Here is a sample of my award winning poetry (just don't ask what award):

My granny was wicked and vile
with no less than a Harlequin's smile
she sliced then excreted his bile
poor grandpa was tossed in a pile



There once was a man from Miami
who stalked and seran wrapped my grammy;
she was lovely and sweet as a lemon
she choked 'em as they spewed out their flemmin;
When her passion perplexed her,
her conscious vexed her,
she then slipped up and was injected by Dexter.
(this is a first rought draft.)

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K9tblaze911
K9tblaze911
3. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 4:15 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 28 2008, 4:15 PM EST
"I never was too keen on rules of writing when it comes to poetry. The great poets seem to do as they please... misspell words, run on sentences, fragmented sentences, etc. I figure any poet can claim poetic license. Couldn't that be the case here? I don't know crap about haiku. Is that were you add the boxed numbers to add to the same sum in any direction? (I know it is not that, but it could be, for all I know.)
Would you mind enlightening me, so I can join in on the fun.

Here is a sample of my award winning poetry (just don't ask what award):

My granny was wicked and vile
with no less than a Harlequin's smile
she sliced then excreted his bile
poor grandpa was tossed in a pile



There once was a man from Miami
who stalked and seran wrapped my grammy;
she was lovely and sweet as a lemon
she choked 'em as they spewed out their flemmin;
When her passion perplexed her,
her conscious vexed her,
she then slipped up and was injected by Dexter.
(this is a first rought draft.)

"
I like it JayC....
I don't know crap about haiku, or hoocky...poor granny......
more...more....more
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JayC16
JayC16
4. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 6:47 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 28 2008, 6:47 PM EST
"I like it JayC....
I don't know crap about haiku, or hoocky...poor granny......
more...more....more"
It took me hours!!!
O wasn't satisified when it was finished last night,but I posted it anyway.
(I was soooo tired)
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Hanksfuture1stwife
Hanksfuture1stwife
5. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 28 2008, 7:50 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 28 2008, 7:50 PM EST
"I never was too keen on rules of writing when it comes to poetry. The great poets seem to do as they please... misspell words, run on sentences, fragmented sentences, etc. I figure any poet can claim poetic license. Couldn't that be the case here? I don't know crap about haiku. Is that were you add the boxed numbers to add to the same sum in any direction? (I know it is not that, but it could be, for all I know.)
Would you mind enlightening me, so I can join in on the fun.

Here is a sample of my award winning poetry (just don't ask what award):

My granny was wicked and vile
with no less than a Harlequin's smile
she sliced then excreted his bile
poor grandpa was tossed in a pile



There once was a man from Miami
who stalked and seran wrapped my grammy;
she was lovely and sweet as a lemon
she choked 'em as they spewed out their flemmin;
When her passion perplexed her,
her conscious vexed her,
she then slipped up and was injected by Dexter.
(this is a first rought draft.)

"
This is Great! Kudos!!
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DrkPassenger
DrkPassenger
6. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:00 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 11:00 AM EST
"Only 17 syllables in any haiku, but I give you credit for trying. I like it. Tiger"
Who knew?--I thought the rule was 5 words, 7 words, 5 words.. I'll try again:

Spurt, spurt, the blood flows
Taking life, I feed once more
Immersing in death.
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MidnightCastAway
MidnightCastAway
7. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:13 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 11:13 AM EST
"Miami's full moon shines brightly
Keen knife blade pierces the aorta, twice
Fulfillment, a job well done
"
All of this is happening in Miami and I was just off for three days . Sonny Crockett
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K9tblaze911
K9tblaze911
8. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:15 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 11:15 AM EST
"It took me hours!!!
O wasn't satisified when it was finished last night,but I posted it anyway.
(I was soooo tired)"
OK, you've had some rest...now give us another one..!! Do you need a boat cruise out on the bay to refresh..?? We can arrange that for you...have some magic jellies, they will help your mind flo...
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K9tblaze911
K9tblaze911
9. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 11:19 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 11:19 AM EST
"Miami's full moon shines brightly
Keen knife blade pierces the aorta, twice
Fulfillment, a job well done
"
I like the way you think....
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mike91848
mike91848
10. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:06 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 12:06 PM EST
"I like the way you think...."
The haiku is the 5-7-5 as far as I know but when it comes to poetry the poet has the last word!

Dexter is so cool
Dexter’s knife creates blood pools
Dexter cleans his tools

This is my STAB at it! LOL!
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K9tblaze911
K9tblaze911
11. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:15 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 12:15 PM EST
"All of this is happening in Miami and I was just off for three days . Sonny Crockett"
I love you Sonny Crockett
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K9tblaze911
K9tblaze911
12. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:17 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 12:17 PM EST
"The haiku is the 5-7-5 as far as I know but when it comes to poetry the poet has the last word!

Dexter is so cool
Dexter’s knife creates blood pools
Dexter cleans his tools

This is my STAB at it! LOL!
"
Great Stab Mike....
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mike91848
mike91848
13. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 12:56 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 12:56 PM EST
There once was an old man named Mike
Whose postings about Rita were well liked?
Who knew then that one of his friends had a NAC
For posting so many thoughts out of Wack!

This old friend seemed so nice
Even PM’d once or twice
Then all hell broke loose
When this old friend tightened the noose

Pointing this way and that talking smack
About friends who tried using tact
But in the end the old friend was caught in the act
Posting smack and did so with such a great NAC

I'm not a poet and my post shows it. In this case though I needed to vent. So I said what I think and will let nature takes its course.
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K9tblaze911
K9tblaze911
14. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 1:04 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 1:04 PM EST
"There once was an old man named Mike
Whose postings about Rita were well liked?
Who knew then that one of his friends had a NAC
For posting so many thoughts out of Wack!

This old friend seemed so nice
Even PM’d once or twice
Then all hell broke loose
When this old friend tightened the noose

Pointing this way and that talking smack
About friends who tried using tact
But in the end the old friend was caught in the act
Posting smack and did so with such a great NAC

I'm not a poet and my post shows it. In this case though I needed to vent. So I said what I think and will let nature takes its course. "
Mike...this is perfect....it's great....i am so proud of you.!!
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mike91848
mike91848
15. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 29 2008, 1:22 PM EST | Post edited: Nov 29 2008, 1:22 PM EST
"Mike...this is perfect....it's great....i am so proud of you.!!"
Thanks! :)
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JayC16
JayC16
16. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 30 2008, 1:07 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 30 2008, 1:07 AM EST
"OK, you've had some rest...now give us another one..!! Do you need a boat cruise out on the bay to refresh..?? We can arrange that for you...have some magic jellies, they will help your mind flo..."
Had M & M's with popcorn yesterday. Oreo's today.


Haiku - 5,7,5, huh?

Oreo's, Mmmmm, dark, white, dark
The cream filling ... so cool, so light
My life for an Oreo


Tiger said 17 syllables 5,7,5

Oreo's, Mmmm Mmmm
Yummy cream filling, cool, light
Twist, seperate, lick then bite
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Tiger-10-8_1
17. RE: Miami's full moon
Nov 30 2008, 11:11 AM EST | Post edited: Nov 30 2008, 11:11 AM EST
JayC16, I said 17 syllables not words, and a Haiku is a Japapese art form and in the time of the samurai and the code of Bushido(read Shogun by James Clavell)all worriors wrote their death poems before they took up their dutys.Each haiku has 4 lines,any word with more than1 syllable counts as 2 or 3 whatever.The syllables do not follow a rule about the number per line,like5,7,5. I am a poet, there are a lot of things you can do with poetry but the rhyme is so out of style nowthat the whole thing has become ridiculous. I wrote this limmerick when I was 10 .
There was a young whore name of Sunny,
with disposition exceedingly funny. ( I can't figure out how to put in form)Line3,She gave so often for free,Line4,without charging a fee,5,that she often came home without money.I rhyme naturally when speaking. BTW I like all the stuff everybody wrote.Tiger
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